Can someone kindly read and review this excerpt? This is a bl story of a prince and his bodyguard(also old friend). Its mostly suppose to be banter between the two characters. So I just need a basic review if the emotions land or if readers could be interested for more.(Eng isn't my first language)

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  • 1 points Piscivore_67

    Lose the all caps.

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