I'm writing a story about a kingdom with a lost (stolen) national red fruit which will be found by the main character, Princess Asya. This is the main plot, but there's a romantic relationship between her and a Swedish guy named Albin, who is living in a fictional village near her fictional kingdom. He fell in love with Asya from the first sight when he was attending a folk dance festival she took part in but he couldn't even know her name so after a year he met her again when she got out of his village's hospital because an evil man st***ed her there when she was searching for the stolen magic water which makes the berries grow.
Asya's father only wants her to marry a prince or there will be a horrible punishment for the guy she'll love secretly. Albin is a farmer so they dated almost everyday in his field. Their relationship evolved so much, but they knew that their dream can never come true. She hated being a princess. But she made her other dream come true, which is finding her kingdom's national fruit (glass berries) and getting it back. This is the happy ending of the main plot.
I don't like the "happily ever after" endings but I also hate pessimistic ones. Is Albin having to move to another village far away or to his original country, saying a permanent goodbye to his love of his life a good ending? or is it too depressing? I feel bad for poor Asya but making them date for all of their lives is also a non creative ending. I'm so confused. What are your suggestions?
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It's difficult to say what is or isn't a good ending, as most scenarios can be done well. It's also hard to offer specific advice based on what little context you've given. That being said, you do have a couple options.
Option 1: What you suggested could work well, as long as the reason for Albin's moving is a good one. He almost has to be forced out of where he lives. Depending on the time period and culture, arranged marriages are a possibility. Albin could already be committed to someone else even if his heart says otherwise.
Option 2: Albin is... ushered on to the next life. Maybe he comes down with a sickness. Maybe he gives his life defending hers. This means that they are separated for good. It would be a bit depressing, since the main plot ends happily, the side plot would make it bittersweet.
It also depends a lot on your theme (if you have one). If you're theme revolves around "duty versus love," an arranged marriage would play into that really well (especially since Asya has a duty as princess to her kingdom). If the theme is more like "there is sacrifice in love," perhaps Albin sacrificing his own life for her sake would be the better move.
There's no one answer. It's your story, and you can shape it however you think would make it the best story it can be. While the opinion of others can help guide you and teach you how to make good story decisions, it is ultimately your story, and only you can know what choices will make your story into the one you want to tell.
All must be lost before the twist you've planted resolves the subplot.
Well...in addition to the other suggestions you've gotten, she could elope with him. That would involve giving up her role as part of the royal family. Whether her father pursues her is another matter. Maybe the fact that she's found and restored the treasure would soften his heart toward her, at least to the extent of saying, "Fine, go, get out of my sight." Or maybe she does something drastic, like threaten to kill herself if he doesn't let her go.
I don't think it's realistic for her to marry the commoner under her father's watch. He probably won't allow that, even if he doesn't carry out his threat to kill the guy. So probably she has to make a choice between accepting her role and abandoning him, or abandoning her role to marry him. Neither one is likely to be "happily ever after," but both could gain a positive spin, if he characters grow enough in the course of the story to accept whatever their fate may be.