There was a much larger message being sent than just “Fuck you, Google” in the original. I think that this Optimizedsearchengine removes all nuance and doesn’t educate the reader on anything they might not know.
I think op could have at least left the last panel. OPs isn’t really a joke either, it’s just flipping off Google with no joke. The last panel would have cut out the excess and saved the actual joke part
If you can edit your OP I do think the last panel was the only joke part of the entire comic, making it 3 panels instead of 20. Right now it has no joke, it’s just flipping off google without the joke panel in the entire original!
r/comedyamputation, 64k people, half of which think the punchline is the only important part of a joke, the other half of which can’t identify a punchline to save their lives.
I think if you included one more panel after this - the one that shows Google sat atop the profit bar chart - then the patient may have had better quality of life post-surgery.
I feel like some people here have a personal grudge against long comics, like conceptually, and just think "shorter is better"
Like taste is subjective, obviously, but I feel like the punchline in the original (which you've removed here, btw) is better served by a long build-up. It's also designed, mostly (in my opinion), to accentuate the point made in those 20 panels.
It's a statement comic that happens to have a punchline.
Shaving off 18 panels doesn't help serve that purpose better than the original.
If you did want to make it jokier, you should have kept the last panel since that one has the punchline. It would have lost the context that made it more effective as a statement comic, but would have left it in a fine position to be an okay statement/joke comic.
You seem to have a lot of haters but I love this one. The origami isn't concise at all, the characters' voices feel fake and awkward, their attempt at breaking the fourth wall fell apart because they don't seem to know what the fourth wall is, and the way it ends makes Google the main character who is vindicated in their terribleness by their success.
Yours is punchy, funny, and if you're into flipping Google off you probably already know everything else the comic says.
Well, Doctor, you’ve removed all of the patient’s limbs and reduced them to a near vegetative state. At least they’re alive, I guess?
"Good job everyone. Beer?"
Yaaaay beer
That’s, like, your opinion
In all seriousness: yes it’s a major amputation. But did the patient really need to be twenty panels? Sometimes, aggressive treatment is required
There was a much larger message being sent than just “Fuck you, Google” in the original. I think that this Optimizedsearchengine removes all nuance and doesn’t educate the reader on anything they might not know.
That's literally the point though. There's nothing comedic about a 20 page lecture. This isnt r/socialissueamputation
I think op could have at least left the last panel. OPs isn’t really a joke either, it’s just flipping off Google with no joke. The last panel would have cut out the excess and saved the actual joke part
They weren't amputating a comedic post to begin with
Thanks, yeah my attempt was to make it more humorous
Also, I didn’t really need 20 panels in order to learn “Google search is worse now because they make more money that way”
If you can edit your OP I do think the last panel was the only joke part of the entire comic, making it 3 panels instead of 20. Right now it has no joke, it’s just flipping off google without the joke panel in the entire original!
Yeah, I could’ve culled it to like 8 instead but was going for more dramatic effect.
I like the minimalism of just flipping off google with no additional context. I found that funny.
The full explanation is genuinely interesting to read
r/comedyamputation, 64k people, half of which think the punchline is the only important part of a joke, the other half of which can’t identify a punchline to save their lives.
I think if you included one more panel after this - the one that shows Google sat atop the profit bar chart - then the patient may have had better quality of life post-surgery.
Honestly, good call.
Welp. You've amputated the patient from its penis. Guess that's the only important part though!
Well, doc, this result... puzzles me. It seems like you made a... completely new patient?
Drastic surgery that might get someone sued, but the patient's tonsillitis is gone and they're alive so I think a pretty good job so far
i don't think the original is even supposed to be funny... what was your goal here?
This subreddit truly does not understand comedy
The original comic wasn't funny, or even remotely coherent, anyway
I feel like some people here have a personal grudge against long comics, like conceptually, and just think "shorter is better"
Like taste is subjective, obviously, but I feel like the punchline in the original (which you've removed here, btw) is better served by a long build-up. It's also designed, mostly (in my opinion), to accentuate the point made in those 20 panels.
It's a statement comic that happens to have a punchline.
Shaving off 18 panels doesn't help serve that purpose better than the original.
If you did want to make it jokier, you should have kept the last panel since that one has the punchline. It would have lost the context that made it more effective as a statement comic, but would have left it in a fine position to be an okay statement/joke comic.
This one's not it, you removed all of the innards you didn't even fill Micheal with the ennards
ok
idek the actual comic but this is infinitely funnier than whatever it may be
Optimized search engine
Honestly it works for me lol.
You seem to have a lot of haters but I love this one. The origami isn't concise at all, the characters' voices feel fake and awkward, their attempt at breaking the fourth wall fell apart because they don't seem to know what the fourth wall is, and the way it ends makes Google the main character who is vindicated in their terribleness by their success.
Yours is punchy, funny, and if you're into flipping Google off you probably already know everything else the comic says.
This makes no sense without seeing the original.
Well the origano was insufferable past the 4 panels, so the amputation is mandatory
thx. wcrolled right past it, i aint reading allat
wasn't there meant to be some kind of message