Hey y’all! Just finished the first few chapters of the first draft of my first book! (A lot of firsts I know 😅) if anyone has time to take a look I’d appreciate it so much. At this point I just want to know if it’s interesting enough for you to keep reading? I’m sure I still will make a ton of edits so just generally speaking. And any other advice is welcome as well!! Thanks!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/10Fiec\_CUfnsmfQjGMAjG\_T0-aiukGLj6Cde1k0iITtw/edit?usp=drivesdk

2 points BeckyHigginsWriting

There's a few tense shifts and minor typos. I also think the exposition in chapter two needs trimming. Pam's house is too long compared to the bar scene.

It is an intriguing start overall. Ava and Luna are compelling characters.

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2 points sheiseatenwithdesire

I like it, I’m intrigued. Needs filling out but it’s a great first draft!

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1 points Book_Girlie365

Thanks!!!

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