https://pavementsuicide.bandcamp.com/track/dead https://pavementsuicide.bandcamp.com/track/this-is-a-suicide
Just looking for some feedback on my first songs ever. The mixing on the first song is rough, I'm aware, because I wasn't really sure how limiters work. Also, if it sounds rough guitar-wise it's because I have a broken pick currently and haven't had time to buy a new one (nearest guitar store near me is like an hour away), but uh I tried my best lol. I'd also like feedback on drums since I'm a vocalist and guitarist, so I'm not exactly sure how to program good drums. Mixing wise, I will improve the first tracks instrumentals for its official release.
Do note, this is meant to be more so 2000s deathcore with some modern elements, hence why I don't mind some minor sloppiness guitar work and why I humanize the drums, try to make them drag or rush just by a bit, mess with velocity and stuff, instead of just quantizing.
I hope you enjoy and Merry Christmas fellow metalheads (and anybody else)
Ngl dog this was a rough listen, vocals just aren’t there yet
Lol yeah, the highs can get a bit scratchy. It does get better after a certain point though, if you're more into lows and pig squeals. What exactly didn't you like abt them, if you don't mind me asking? I wanna know how I can improve and such. These are just demos recorded on my phone mic, so i expected them to sound meh, but honestly I personally enjoy my vocals, though my highs do have that lore grindcore-y, screechy sound. I'm self taught and this is the only way I do them without hurting myself outside of tunnel throat highs. Thanks for the criticism tho, appreciate it!
The guitars are TERRIFYINGLY offbeat. I think you probably trying to do some tremolo lead guitar or something but the speed and tone does not quite live up to it. Guitars and bass tone could be lower and a lot more distorted.
The guitar’s and vocal’s mix is a has too much presence Vocal is also too loud, it drowns all the instruments.
The tones of your screams could be improved. (Too much Arytenoids imo)
I appreciate the honest criticism! Firstly, yeah, the guitars are off beat. This is my first time ever really making music outside of just guitar, so I recorded the guitar and actually programmed the drums to match it, which might explain why they're offbeat. There is no bass (yet), and I'm saving up for a condenser mic and audio interface since I currently mic up my Amp and record my vocals with my phone mic. I'm still figuring out mixing and stuff, the drums have been the biggest issue since the kicks are so quiet but the snare is so loud. Would you suggest I add a limiter to drums as well? (As in the second link's track, I only added a limiter to the master track, distorted guitar track, and vocals, assuming drums were loud enough).
Scream wise, I'm not really sure what the difference between arytenoids and false cords are, I'm completely self taught and this is the only way I know how to do them safely. I personally like them, but to each their own.
Thanks for being honest :)
Keep it up, man! If you’re 15, you got all the time in the world to put into music. Wish I had that kinda time! You’ll get better with each song you write/record. An audio interface will really help and there is tons of free software out there you can do it with. Just search YouTube for something like “writing deathcore with free plugins” and you should find some videos.
Yeah, I've been looking into audio interfaces and found a Scarlett Solo 2i2 (looks like either a 3rd gen or 4th gen bit I'm not sure since it's only 120 dollars) and condenser mic combo on Facebook marketplace and with Christmas money I'm almost there :) I also do need to fix the drums since they are quite off time since I humanized the feel a bit too much, now it just sounds like an actual shitty deathcore band with an actual shitty drummer (which was my situation when i had a drummer).
Thanks for the feedback man, I'll try and find a good Amp modeler and stuff, or maybe i could just run my LT25 Mustang Amp through the Audio Interface since it has a USB cable? Idk, thanks for the recommendation though, I'll definitely look into it :)
That was horrible. I’m really sad I spent the 30 seconds I did listening to that.
Well that's not really helpful but thanks ig?