beta request] [In progress] [around 9k]. Is anyone free to read my story? I would like some feedback on it.
Ik it’s not good but i don’t know exactly how to fix it or what to fix or work on really to fix it ya know. I know I need to work on my character and world building because I have a hard time on progressing the story or feeling like it’s not good enough. Most of it is me writing whatever comes to mind until I get hit with a road block because idk how to progress the story anymore. And bits of whatever I was recently reading to watching and inspired by.
It is essentially your typical revenge story with edgy seinen mc but made by a complete novice writer who's just trying to hone his craft.
The story is about a teenage guy name Yasha who was "lucky" enough to be blessed as one of "death favorites" who get a fragment of her power to use to their own desires. His goal is to kill the 7 Jōtei of each planet to get his vengeance on them for he was directed to aim his lust for vengeance at them as they were the one who slaughter his family
I put the story out filled with tons of flaws and grammar errors because i honestly suck at punctuation placements and character building so I want some critique from the masses on it as a whole. Most of it is me just writing whatever comes to mind until and occasionally after inspiration from reading or writing other stories. And a lot of it is just me not knowing how to progress the story anymore and just get stuck on how to progress it for weeks. I'll def be butthurt but grateful fron any genuine criticism that'll help me get better at writing and building better characters because I suck at it. There's 3 other parts but I want some critique on this first.
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Thank you!
Hello! I can take a quick look if you like! I'm also an amateur writer but two heads are better than one, I suppose. I sent a request for commenter access on docs. :)
Hello again.
I went through about half of the story. I added some comments, both grammar-wise and stylistically. I hope you find some of them useful! It's so easy to feel like my writing isn't good enough, but if it's something that makes you happy when you do it, don't give up!
If your the Anya person i accepted it
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